This 2nd person narration… not used to it!

SRSLY. I keep writing a story, then deleting it, the writing a new one, then deleting again. I think this will be a never ending cycle of writing and deleting stories. WHY DOES THIS HAPPEN!?

Idk, cuz you’re liek 2tly a betch?
SHYADDAP. If I’m a betch then you’re a betch too, BETCH.

But the new story I was writing is in second person narration. Didn’t put a title on it yet. I actually haven’t written a full story in second person before. It’s usually first person. I SUCK AT THIRD PERSON NARRATION. But I was inspired to write a story in second person. It’s because of Choice of Games! I especially like their game Choice of Romance. It was my favorite… a while back. Yes. DAMNIT I WANTED MOAAARRR!!!

SO I’m planning on making/writing a game with tons of choices like choice of games. It seems fun for some reason. I just hope it turns out well!

What if people get bored because there’s so many choices?
No! You lie! I like many choices. SO SHOULD YOU.
I’d rather read a kinetic visual novel than have too many choices.
Well… well then…

Of course, I gotta write a full on story before having a lot of choices. If there’s no story… yeah… it would definitely be boring. Probably just gonna be like (if no real story)… for example…

“You’re walking. You can’t stop. How should you stop!?

  1. Kill yourself.
  2. Trip on something.
  3. Grab onto a really heavy object.

YOU LOSE.”

Wait, how did I lose? I DIDN’T PICK ANYTHING.

BLAH. Whatevers. I’ll continue my nonsensical story in a few…

Outlining, writing, and more writing…

Finally, I actually made an outline for the new game/visual novel, Odd Love Test ~a taste of sweet revenge~. Sort of changed a few things. As usual, I’m struggling with making the characters’ personalities. BUT anyway…


Ana gets captivated by Rin, who she met at the school roof, and when her boyfriend Ken sees them together, he misunderstands the situation and thinks she’s cheating on him. The two broke up and Ana wanted revenge to show that he will regret breaking up with her. Ana’s cousin Risa made a “love test” to see if Ken still has feelings for her by having a fake (popular) boyfriend, Rin and looking as if she happy with him when in actuality she has no feelings for him, but will that “love test” really succeed?


Erm, I hope that synopsis wasn’t too confusing. I got the outline down, but not the synopsis. How the story will go…

  1. Prologue: Dreaming about… what will happen in the future!
  2. Chapter 1: The break up? The “new boyfriend?”
  3. Chapter 2: Ken’s thoughts about what just happened.
  4. Chapter 3: How Ana acts with fake boyfriend
  5. Chapter 4: Ken’s thoughts about the two of them and what he does next
  6. Chapter 5: What the “love test” really is about
  7. Chapter 6: Is this fake boyfriend… not fake after all!?
  8. Chapter 7: Ken really doesn’t like seeing Ana with her “new boyfriend!”
  9. Epilogue: What will happen next!? Ken or Rin!?
  10. Several separate endings!

Wait, this is an outline right? IT IZ RAIT!? *gets stressed and passes out*

2As of now, the writing seems super boring. BUT. It’s just the draft for now. So… I think I’ll rewrite it however many times necessary, fix it up, once I’m finished writing the first time.

But seriously…

HOW DID MY WRITING SUDDENLY GET SO BORING!? 

I don’t get it. It must be because of the “break up.” Plus the relationship (dull relationship). How can I write a dull relationship more exciting? I DUN FACKING KNOE.

I’m not sure if this is an otome game/visual novel anymore (GxB game) because there’s going to be 2 narrators, Ana and Ken (girl and boy) which means… GxB and BxG. How… does that… happen…!? It’s partially otome? ……………………..WHATEVER.

After all the writing I was doing with Virtual Boyfriend: Secret Diary NAO I haz 2 RAIT MOAR AGEN for a different game…

BLARGHH. *falls on bed and becomes a hibernating bear*

I don’t understand this storyline.

Was trying to write something different from the boring-esque storyline into a weird type of storyline. I don’t even understand it myself! But it has to do with a time-traveling rose. Why is the rose a time-traveling rose!? I don’t get it.


The main character opens a box with stuff from last year and finds an old journal entry. She opens it up and each page was faded and looked like the entries were unfinished. On each page, a rose petal was imprinted. It was a weird red color as if it were some sort of poison, but she was curious about it and touched it. Then it was if her fingers were being sucked in touching the imprinted rose petal.

Strangely, she entered a strange room she doesn’t remember seeing before. Around her was the smell of roses, an intoxicating aroma in the air. Ahead of her was a man with a crystal ball—a psychic who tells her the future of this world. She was told she always visits him to ask for her daily readings, but this month (February 2012) is different. The man tells her that she will find love this month and gives her a strange rose that looks as if a spell was cast on it.

Her fingers get sucked into the thorns and bleed, as if forming a pact with the rose.58The man and the room disappeared and the rose she was holding suddenly turned into a red pen, thinking holding a rose was just her imagination. But it wasn’t. Her finger tips have marks on them like she really was pierced by the rose thorns. She thought the pen was weird and threw it somewhere!

When she went out of that room, it was almost like all of her memories were lost, including where her home was. Except she actually appears in front of the house and her mother who was out fixing her front yard tells her why she isn’t in school.


This is really… confusing to me. I’m not sure how to write this all out. But the girl is supposed to go to school and doesn’t remember anything, like where to go and what to do, until she meets someone who knows that she’s supposed to go to her specific class and what not.

The previous story I was writing was just reminiscing about the past and getting new journal entries. But this story, she actually time travels! Then she finds that the pages in her journal at home (when she comes back) are all blank. The pen that she threw out was right next to the journal for some reason! HOW DID THAT HAPPEN!? A burglar found the pen and went into her room to put it next to her journal. LOL I don’t know anymore!

Sum1 haz 2 HALP MEE wit dis STORY!! *gives up and falls asleep*

Making a story with character personalities?

Just looked at a deviantART page saying how to create a story through a character. This is supposedly by a disney artist, Brian Kesinger. It will probably help for writers who struggle with character development!

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Itsuka: Don’t you think this sunset is wonderful? *blissful smile*
Shinji: No. Bye. *hurries away from Itsuka with a straight face*
Itsuka: ……………FINE!! Be that way!! *sits on grass feeling alone*

I’ll hope I’m doing it right. I’ll try it out on my story. Or maybe I’ve been doing that and haven’t noticed? So, type up how the character feels in a situation? Sort of?

Virtual Boyfriend Secret Diary is getting dull, so maybe it’s the characters that need to be worked on! I keep changing the personalities of my characters, because I’m not sure how they’re supposed to be like especially the male characters…!!

  1. Itsuka Sasaki, cheerful and childish. Has a habit of saying things out loud (her thoughts) and is a bit of a klutz.
  2. Mana Shimizu, energetic and sociable, until her “belongings” (such as her friends) get taken away from her. Jealous at times and has temper tantrums.
  3. Yuko Nakamura, gentle and caring, like a mother to her friends (or maybe everyone!). Can be very soft-spoken at times and passive.
  4. Shinji Kimura, stubborn and dishonest. It takes a lot of courage for him to say his true feelings. Sometimes can be competitive and likes to win.
  5. Ren Inoue, mostly shy and nervous. He has a calm and collected front, but tends to not speak and try to be “nonexistent.”
  6. Ichiro Tanaka, playful and outgoing. He can be narcissistic and selfish when it comes to things he sees attractive.
  7. Rikuo Okamoto, friendly and mellow. He’s usually seen walking around the school without any reason and may look like a dimwit.

Those are pretty much the main characters. I’m not sure if I used the right words to describe the characters, like childish and cheerful or whatever. But I guess those words at least kind of describe those characters.

So, if I make the story with these characters and those certain personality traits, I wonder how the story would be like…!! *starts to write again after a 1 and 1/2 day break*

This is getting boring! Or am I just not too into it?

I feel like I really need to change my writing style. It’s getting really boring and annoying when I read it and write my story. BUT I AT LEAST… have 7,089 words

But seriously, I was just like… I NEED TO WRITE LIKE I DO IN MY JOURNAL. Then when I write, it’s all serious and GETS BORING DAMN YOU.

I’m still on Day 1 (Chapter 1) and since it’s a dating sim, I’m all like, “is this just… gonna happen EVERY single day? THIS BORINGNESS!?”46Virtual Boyfriend: Secret Diary. Should I also change the title, like how it’s written? I won’t change the full words, I mean I feel like I should take out the “:” and put in something else… LIKE Virtual Boyfriend -Secret Diary- or Virtual Boyfriend ~Secret Diary~ or Virtual Boyfriend *Secret Diary* or… okay. I don’t know.

Well then. I think I need to figure out more on how the story goes, not just my writing style. It’s pretty much the story that MIGHT end up getting boring. So, the order of the first day…

  1. Checking horoscope on how the day would go,
  2. eating breakfast/skipping breakfast/forgetting lunch
  3. going to school (usually late),
  4. meeting with a guy she “hates” and a new guy,
  5. going to P.E. without a P.E. uniform (no, she didn’t go to P.E. naked),
  6. having mini games (like when going to lunch, playing basketball in P.E., working at a restaurant to get money),
  7. cleaning the school,
  8. hanging out with her friends (but what to do…),
  9. going to work to get money,
  10. go home to talk to online boyfriend or just sleep.

I guess that’s… what I have planned for almost everyday. But if it’s everyday… wouldn’t that seem boring? That’s what I’m thinking.

I’m probably not gonna ask my teenage editor, showing her what I have and asking her what I have to do anymore. My other editor needs to see everything I have, or else I’m gonna go crazy out of my mind cuz I wouldn’t know what this outline should be like, or if I even need to do the exact same thing everyday.

Okay… uh… I’ll just make it sound like Itsuka is talking/narrating as if she’s writing in her journal for the whole day. I’ll see how it turns out…

I’ll hope if I do that, I can type faster!