Finally! *attempts to make mystery novel*

In my previous post, I was writing in 2nd person narrative. I SUCK AT IT. *rage quit* So, I went with 1st person narrative, something I’m actually good at…

In this story, I’m writing a mystery novel. I’ve actually never really wrote any mystery novels. I only just like mystery stuff. So, I went to this site to give me tips on how to write a mystery. I thought it’s really helpful. BUT even though I read it, I probably won’t even write a good mystery in the end. I’M JEST LIEK DAT OHKAY!? 

It’s my first time
This tip is helpful.
ORLY— *gets punched in the face*

Thankfully, this time, I managed to make a full outline before I started writing. Now, I’m writing it and I’m liek EZ PZ. But I got too excited again and made pictures for the game. WHY DO I TEND TO DO THAT UGH. But I at least made the prologue! It’s like, super short though. I already tested it out (game version) and put in some creepy music and I’m like…

NOOOOOOO THIS IS SCARY! HALP ME.
You shouldn’t have put in that creepy music in the first place, dumbass.

Then I text my cousin saying how scared I am but that didn’t make me feel any better… she at least pointed out how hot the weather is today to make me stop thinking about the scariness. She’s so sweet~

So far, I have 1k words…. THAT’S NOT EVEN ENOUGH FOR A DAMN PROLOGUE.
But… it’s a super short story
DON’T “SUPER SHORT STORY” ME!!

I planned for it to be only 10k words. I wonder if I’d even reach that far or if… if it really will be under 10k words? For some reason, it might seem long. It looks like there’s two parts to the game. DAMNIT I DIDN’T WANT DISSSSSsssssS.

But… I’m happy to at least have “something” to write about. Yayness.

Outlining, writing, and more writing…

Finally, I actually made an outline for the new game/visual novel, Odd Love Test ~a taste of sweet revenge~. Sort of changed a few things. As usual, I’m struggling with making the characters’ personalities. BUT anyway…


Ana gets captivated by Rin, who she met at the school roof, and when her boyfriend Ken sees them together, he misunderstands the situation and thinks she’s cheating on him. The two broke up and Ana wanted revenge to show that he will regret breaking up with her. Ana’s cousin Risa made a “love test” to see if Ken still has feelings for her by having a fake (popular) boyfriend, Rin and looking as if she happy with him when in actuality she has no feelings for him, but will that “love test” really succeed?


Erm, I hope that synopsis wasn’t too confusing. I got the outline down, but not the synopsis. How the story will go…

  1. Prologue: Dreaming about… what will happen in the future!
  2. Chapter 1: The break up? The “new boyfriend?”
  3. Chapter 2: Ken’s thoughts about what just happened.
  4. Chapter 3: How Ana acts with fake boyfriend
  5. Chapter 4: Ken’s thoughts about the two of them and what he does next
  6. Chapter 5: What the “love test” really is about
  7. Chapter 6: Is this fake boyfriend… not fake after all!?
  8. Chapter 7: Ken really doesn’t like seeing Ana with her “new boyfriend!”
  9. Epilogue: What will happen next!? Ken or Rin!?
  10. Several separate endings!

Wait, this is an outline right? IT IZ RAIT!? *gets stressed and passes out*

2As of now, the writing seems super boring. BUT. It’s just the draft for now. So… I think I’ll rewrite it however many times necessary, fix it up, once I’m finished writing the first time.

But seriously…

HOW DID MY WRITING SUDDENLY GET SO BORING!? 

I don’t get it. It must be because of the “break up.” Plus the relationship (dull relationship). How can I write a dull relationship more exciting? I DUN FACKING KNOE.

I’m not sure if this is an otome game/visual novel anymore (GxB game) because there’s going to be 2 narrators, Ana and Ken (girl and boy) which means… GxB and BxG. How… does that… happen…!? It’s partially otome? ……………………..WHATEVER.

After all the writing I was doing with Virtual Boyfriend: Secret Diary NAO I haz 2 RAIT MOAR AGEN for a different game…

BLARGHH. *falls on bed and becomes a hibernating bear*

Background story + get with all the guys!

Itsuka: “PEACE AHHOUUUTT!!
Shinji: “You don’t get to peace out.”
Ichiro: “She isn’t talking to you. She wants to peace out with me.”
Itsuka: “Wait, what?
Mana: “Why does SHE get all the guys and not me!?*goes psycho*

I just… wanted to explain the random picture…

Made a little story of Itsuka’s past and now she gets to be cutesy with all the guys! The guy who is supposed to be her real father is actually a teacher at her school who used to be her guardian (took care of her when she was little), BUT she forgot because she got amnesia in a car accident.

56She doesn’t know anything. Only her teacher and Ichiro, her older brother. The teacher, Tetsuya took both of them in when their parents died. Her mother died when she gave birth to her, and the father committed suicide. They were abandoned on the street when the couple (Tetsuya and his girlfriend) found them.

The girlfriend of Tetsuya was going to drive Itsuka to school and the two of them suddenly got into a car accident because she’s emotionally unstable after the fight she got in with Tetsuya. After that, Tetsuya decided that he can’t handle her emotional issues and separated from her, only taking Ichiro with him.

WHY did he want to take care of one of the kids and not leave both with his ex?

He’s afraid that he might take advantage of the girl when she’s older who isn’t his real daughter. He insisted on taking care of the kids when he saw they were abandoned, so he should at least take care of the boy, Ichiro.

This seems a bit weird to me. Honestly, I was trying to make a story where Itsuka can end up with him and not as her real father. So… this is what happened when I tried to come up with it.

But the previous story was!!

Itsuka’s mother died and the father couldn’t take care of two kids. He didn’t like Itsuka because she “caused” his wife’s death. He sent her away to a friend far from where he lives and asked her to take care of her instead. Even though he doesn’t like her, he didn’t want to just leave her on the streets. So, she was left with the mother and her other child, who is now Itsuka’s brother.

She has no father to take care of her now, because her step mother divorced her husband. Her husband took a lot of the money with him, and now Itsuka’s step family is broke.

WHY did Itsuka’s real father want to leave her with a poor family?

He wants his friend to know his hate for her too, because that friend now needs to take care of two kids and she’s emotionally unstable even with taking care of her real child. He wants Itsuka to suffer like he did when his wife died.

Wait a second… has this story ever been this… dark or tragic? I NEVAR THAHT AHBAOT EETTT!! *stupid face*

BUT ANYWAY. I took out one guy in the story, Aki, her step brother. Unless he can just be some random guy she always sees, like if you take the train, she sees him all the time and he gives you advice or something. Like, talking to strangers…

Itsuka: “GAWD my mom at home is so STOOOPID.”
Aki: “Hit her in the face with a wake-up-to-reality punch when she’s out of control.”
Itsuka: “Thanks, stranger! I think I will! Goodbye, whoever you are!”

Then, coincidentally! She meets the stranger again! “It…was fate…!”

I don’t think I made much progress with writing the draft. Only coming up with ideas! Okay. That’s enough. I shouldn’t be writing so much in here. But. I am.

Making a story with character personalities?

Just looked at a deviantART page saying how to create a story through a character. This is supposedly by a disney artist, Brian Kesinger. It will probably help for writers who struggle with character development!

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Itsuka: Don’t you think this sunset is wonderful? *blissful smile*
Shinji: No. Bye. *hurries away from Itsuka with a straight face*
Itsuka: ……………FINE!! Be that way!! *sits on grass feeling alone*

I’ll hope I’m doing it right. I’ll try it out on my story. Or maybe I’ve been doing that and haven’t noticed? So, type up how the character feels in a situation? Sort of?

Virtual Boyfriend Secret Diary is getting dull, so maybe it’s the characters that need to be worked on! I keep changing the personalities of my characters, because I’m not sure how they’re supposed to be like especially the male characters…!!

  1. Itsuka Sasaki, cheerful and childish. Has a habit of saying things out loud (her thoughts) and is a bit of a klutz.
  2. Mana Shimizu, energetic and sociable, until her “belongings” (such as her friends) get taken away from her. Jealous at times and has temper tantrums.
  3. Yuko Nakamura, gentle and caring, like a mother to her friends (or maybe everyone!). Can be very soft-spoken at times and passive.
  4. Shinji Kimura, stubborn and dishonest. It takes a lot of courage for him to say his true feelings. Sometimes can be competitive and likes to win.
  5. Ren Inoue, mostly shy and nervous. He has a calm and collected front, but tends to not speak and try to be “nonexistent.”
  6. Ichiro Tanaka, playful and outgoing. He can be narcissistic and selfish when it comes to things he sees attractive.
  7. Rikuo Okamoto, friendly and mellow. He’s usually seen walking around the school without any reason and may look like a dimwit.

Those are pretty much the main characters. I’m not sure if I used the right words to describe the characters, like childish and cheerful or whatever. But I guess those words at least kind of describe those characters.

So, if I make the story with these characters and those certain personality traits, I wonder how the story would be like…!! *starts to write again after a 1 and 1/2 day break*

I couldn’t concentrate on writing… I made part of the GUI…!!

BAH. I shouldn’t be doing this. Dating sim GUI… I already made a GUI for Virtual Boyfriend Secret Diary when I’m supposed to friggin WRITE. I’m messing around too much. I gotz to concentrate!

The GUI that I made using ComiPo!… it looks really childish and unorganized. BECAUSE. I’m not an amazing GUI artist. But I think it looks decent for some reason. Maybe it’s meant to look childish!?

config1I had fun putting in the text…

  1. Go back: back to playing the game
  2. Leave session: main menu/top
  3. Leave 4 EVER: quit game
  4. Diary, don’t look!: list of journal entries
  5. (drawing of Aries the Ram): daily horoscope readings
  6. erase: erase what’s on the board
  7. draw: draw anything on the board with white chalk
  8. color: color in your drawings on the board with pink chalk
  9. status: your status…?
  10. bag: inventory! food? money? other stuff
  11. extra: extra stuff…?

I’m just not experienced enough to actually put in all the coding… UGH. I just wanted to make this. It might change but whatever~


Aside from that! I wrote 10,012 words! I have a feeling this game might be more than just 30,000 words. Because… prologue = 405 words, day 1 = 8,385 words, day 2 = 1,202 words. There are 15 days. And the intro with day 1 and 2 are already 10k. So what would that mean…

Each day (Feb 1 to 15) might be 8k words… that equals…

*cough cough* “WHAT!? Do I need to write over 120,000 words!?”
“Yes. Yes you do. So that means… STAHP PROCRASTINATING!!
“Damn you. I’LL PROCRASTINATE WHEREVER WHENEVER I WANT!!”
“Then you might finish it by 2016, not 2015!”
NO, BITCH! I’ll finish it! I’ll find people who like to do programmy-arty shit without being paid to finish this all!!”
“Well, good luck doing that… when you do.”
“…………………….do you really mean good luck?*gets backstabbed*

Okay. I spent too many hours working on the pointless (kind of) GUI. I should write… again…

This is getting boring! Or am I just not too into it?

I feel like I really need to change my writing style. It’s getting really boring and annoying when I read it and write my story. BUT I AT LEAST… have 7,089 words

But seriously, I was just like… I NEED TO WRITE LIKE I DO IN MY JOURNAL. Then when I write, it’s all serious and GETS BORING DAMN YOU.

I’m still on Day 1 (Chapter 1) and since it’s a dating sim, I’m all like, “is this just… gonna happen EVERY single day? THIS BORINGNESS!?”46Virtual Boyfriend: Secret Diary. Should I also change the title, like how it’s written? I won’t change the full words, I mean I feel like I should take out the “:” and put in something else… LIKE Virtual Boyfriend -Secret Diary- or Virtual Boyfriend ~Secret Diary~ or Virtual Boyfriend *Secret Diary* or… okay. I don’t know.

Well then. I think I need to figure out more on how the story goes, not just my writing style. It’s pretty much the story that MIGHT end up getting boring. So, the order of the first day…

  1. Checking horoscope on how the day would go,
  2. eating breakfast/skipping breakfast/forgetting lunch
  3. going to school (usually late),
  4. meeting with a guy she “hates” and a new guy,
  5. going to P.E. without a P.E. uniform (no, she didn’t go to P.E. naked),
  6. having mini games (like when going to lunch, playing basketball in P.E., working at a restaurant to get money),
  7. cleaning the school,
  8. hanging out with her friends (but what to do…),
  9. going to work to get money,
  10. go home to talk to online boyfriend or just sleep.

I guess that’s… what I have planned for almost everyday. But if it’s everyday… wouldn’t that seem boring? That’s what I’m thinking.

I’m probably not gonna ask my teenage editor, showing her what I have and asking her what I have to do anymore. My other editor needs to see everything I have, or else I’m gonna go crazy out of my mind cuz I wouldn’t know what this outline should be like, or if I even need to do the exact same thing everyday.

Okay… uh… I’ll just make it sound like Itsuka is talking/narrating as if she’s writing in her journal for the whole day. I’ll see how it turns out…

I’ll hope if I do that, I can type faster!

Some sort of gameplay! Cosplay cafe!?

So earlier, I was writing up an outline on how the dating sim/story whatever goes for Virtual Boyfriend: Secret Diary. Along the way I’m liek, “what if there was a school-girl cosplay cafe!?” I couldn’t make any wardrobe changes in comipo, they’re all school uniforms, and the main character Itsuka has to work and get money to buy food and such for each meal to get energy!

Since it’s work, she has to put on a new uniform different from the one she’s wearing. That includes a wig! That way… no one… recognizes her. EXCEPT. For her father. LOL.44And so. I was at first thinking of making this as a little mini game where you can walk around the place and serve people and stuff, but it seemed complicated to make a mini game like that when this is just a non-commercial game *sad face*

Or it can be like… there are several customers in the cafe, and you can just choose one of them, and then! Serve them and talk with them about… stuff… if i get a really good programmer who doesn’t mind not getting paid to do that… then it would be cools~

I got another editor! She’s my friend I’ve known for a while and has helped me a lot, and it seems like she can help me also when my other editor is out of touch. But I’m assuming… she’ll be overwhelmed with reading the entire story, which is gonna be really long (she’s still a teenager, but is really good with helping me out). So, I’ll just have my other editor read all that shieeet whenever she’s available.

But maybe she’ll say something about the little mini game. Because she likes games too. Maybe I should leave it out, maybe I shouldn’t. BAH I’m just rambling wtf.